Beyond the pain...her will to live.
Beyond the agony...her will to fly.
Amongst the sound of nature her weakened cry.
Amongst the beauty of nature her fight for life.
You who have shown no mercy will see her shine.
You who have broken her down will see her rise.
A broken wing...a broken spirit.
In time will heal and no wrath of men can rise above it.
44 comments:
nice. wonder why you walked away from the form you started with on either side of the elipse...i also like the contrast between broken wings and rising above...nice...
hear! hear! beautifully done! very well said!
that speaks to me of determination. Of someone who gets stronger with each sorrow and suffering that she has experienced.
thank you
No broken heart to be broken here... not even those wings.. who'd dare
Beautiful One shot!
hey great to see you at one shot again! smiles.
Hi,Brian.Actually since I started to join one shot I've been amazed on how lots of ways there aer to write.The styles are all phenomenal.I guess was just trying some new dishes.But you're right.I guess this is the form I'm most relaxed with.
Thanks for the support and encouragement,always.
Thanks,Hope.I guess this one reflects me as a perwson,too.I hate to lose face down.
Happy one shot!!Can't wait to read yours.
I'm glad you liked it,Dulce!Haha,well I hope no one dares.
Thanks,Brian.I really so wanted to join earlier.But personal stuffs and work are really cramming up on me.
Thanks for hosting one shot,friend!
Now THAT'S touching.
Thanks,Timoteo!So nice to see someone new again,this week.
Hope you could drop by,again.
Like the singsong rhythm and the repeating phrase style. Nice. Thanks also for your comments at my site/
Strong narrative/emotional work.
This touched my heart very much. Love the picture as well. Blessings.
Hi,Hedgewitch!Thanks for coming.
The pleasure is all mine.Truly liked your piece.
Still long way to go,but thanks for appreciating my work.
Thanks for dropping by,Steve!
Fell in love with the pic the first time I saw it.I'm so glad you liked it,too!
Hope your day was good,JBR!!Thanks for the visit!
Yaah! Love it! You have written a very special poem. :)
Thanks,River.I loved yours.Truly enjoyed reading it.
Hope you can drop by,again.
Lovely, with a bit of redeeming fierceness!
Lady Nyo
Love it. Strength is the result of brokenness that is released from the chains of resentment, unforgiveness and self-pity. Sounds very much like freedom intertwined in your writing here. Bravo!
Hi,Jane!Yeah,I guess the girl is a fighter!!
Thanks for dropping by!
Thanks ,One Heart!So glad you appreciated my work.
Always a joy after each pain.Strength comes naturally if one believes.
This is simply extraordinary.. somehow I have always believed wings growing again and again..and again.. loved it..
You have grown well June, you're theme are becoming deeper and you're style is your own.
Birds soar in the sky to inspire men's hearts, encouraging us to aspire to reach great heights.
Nice One Shot, J_B!
i like the beyond and instead and inspite of feeling in your poem..nice one shot
That's a lovely thought,Ramesh Sood!!Like life.There's always a second chance,a third and a fourth!
Thank you so much for the visit.I truly appreciate it.
Thanks,Ronald.You're one of those who gave me the push to do better.
A privilege to know great writers like you and the people I met at One Shot!
I agree!!Looking at those creatures gives you the courage to take chances and flap the wings of courage you have inside.
Thanks for the visit,Eric!!
I love to do opposites.Good
winning over bad.
Triumph over pain.Love this thought so much.
Thanks for reading my work,Claudia!
Fragile and delicate. Nice one shot.
Victoria
Hi,Victoria!I'm so glad you saw the fragility in her.
Thanks for taking time to read my post!Truly appreciate it!
Something about invictus here..out of the night that covers me...I am the master of my fate, etc. Yes definitely about rising above the pain and persecution to forge ahead. Well done. Thank you, Gay @beachanny
yeah,that's the idea.rising above the adversaries.
Thanks for taking time to read my post,Gay!I appreciate it.
Dear June
It so beautiful.. I liked it so much...Very well done..
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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Thanks,Shashi!Was so nervous about posting this one but I really liked it a lot myself.So glad you did ,too.
Hope you're having a great day!
a wonderful poem that flows so well..enjoyed this pete
I love the strong message in this piece. Broken, but not beaten. Lovely.
Still need to learn more,but thanks!A compliment is always welcome!
Thanks,Pete!
And I loved yours,Talon!One of the best ones I've read this week!
Thanks for dropping by!
Such strong sentiments put in beautifully simple words, great job :)
Thank you so much.Sometimes i feel my works are too amateurish compared to others.So glad to meet people like you who appreciate my work for their simplicity!
Hope you can drop by again,me_duress!
Hi June,
I love this one too!
I wish that I can place one of your post on my blog. Just a thought.
multibrand.blogspot.com
Thanks,Harry!It would be a privilege!Your blog is one of the finest ones I've had the pleasure to find!
I know it's just a thought,but anytime you want to post any of my works please feel free to.
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