Ballet shoes
and mystic moves.
Pretty sights
that bring out sighs.
My dream,in unconcious longing I create!
Dirt filled snickers
walk its way under lights that flickers.
Busy faces
that have lost their life's aces.
My reality,in concious longing I debate.
But I fight to dream ,to dance my way.
In the dancefloor of life I dare to sway.
Ballet shoes in rough roads I can't wear.
But my dirt filled snickers will take me there.
48 comments:
It's really nice and pretty. I like it ^-^
Thanks,Shan.So nice of you to drop by!I appreciate it.
I love the contrast of sneakers and ballet shoes all wrapped up in the dreams of one person...
Thanks ,Talon.Fell in love with the contrast myself.
Loved your piece.Truly amazing write!
I agree with Talon here, the image combines perfect with your words, sweet poem. Here is my entry http://scentofmyheart.wordpress.com/2010/11/10/libertango/
You've got to know your role(s)!
Thanks,Blaga!Your piece made me feel sexy,haha.
So nice of you to drop by.Happy day!
Thanks for the advice,Booguloo!Dreams and reality can get confusing.
Thanks for dropping by!
A very nice ballet of words!
Love the last 2 lines, and the comparison of the ballet shoes and sneakers.
http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2010/12/06/snow/
your blog and this write are both just beautiful! im happy i found you thru potluck! :)
Kellie
Lovely musical piece, wanting to let your snickers take you to new places, of delicate yet powerful moves.
totally agree. here's mine- http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/01/15/head/
we must learn to dance in the shoes we have been given...dance on...dance on...
be graceful in your snickers and dance away. very nice poem like it
http://words4afriend.wordpress.com/2010/12/06/plateau/
dynamic, elegant, and smart piece.
Happy Potluck!
A+
hello again ;) I love the comparison of life to a dancefloor... and this part:
'But I fight to dream ,to dance my way.'
Awesome!
I thought the contrast of the reality (sneaker) and dream (ballet slipper) was really heartfelt. I like this a lot. ~ C
I dance your words with or without shoes...
great work
wonderful thoughts portrayed nicely in this creative piece of poetry!
thank you
Thanks,Petrina.Took me awhile to find the right words.But I truly loved this pic and I wanted to use it.so glad you liked it!
Unknowngnome,thank you so much for always supporting my works.
Always a joy to see you here!
Thanks,Jessica.The contrast was what captured my attention when I saw the pic.
Thanks for your compliments.
The pleasure is all mine,Kelly.ALways a joy to meet fellow word lovers!
Do drop by,again!
Thanks,fiveloaf.Your piece was amazing as usual!
True,Brian.It doesn't pay to dance on shoes you're not accustomed to.
Thanks for the comment.Always appreciate it!
Thanks,Scott!Will surely try!
Hope to see you here,again!
Thanks,Jingle!Thanks for dropping by and complimenting my works.
Thanks,Magdalena.I love that line ,too.Sometimes words just pop out from nowhere.SO glad you liked that line,too.
Looking forward to seeing you here,again!
Thanks,Magdalena.I love that line ,too.Sometimes words just pop out from nowhere.SO glad you liked that line,too.
Looking forward to seeing you here,again!
So glad you liked the contrast,too.That was what drew me to the pic and made the words flow from me.
Hope you can drop by again,Cherryl!
You're always so sweet,Dulce.It is truly a joy to have met you.
Thanks for always dropping by!
Hope,thanks for the comment.It always amaze me how beautiful your words get together.To be complimented by you is a privilege.
Kellie,real sorry for the mistake on the name.
Pardon my mistake!
HI June!
love this poem!
I LOVE to dance, but most often, I'm in my Sketcher's mary janes getting through "the dance of life" at work and home ♥
loving the dance whatever the beat!
*blessings of peace and joy*
~Maria
Hi,Maria!Me,too!Love to dance and sing.But now mostly dancing the dance of life!
Hope you're having a great day!
Sweet and beautiful! Blessings.
yes - yes - yes - what else than those dirt filled snickers...
A great write that really lifts one up!
Thanks AbThomas!Appreciate the compliment!I'm truly glad you liked it!
JBR,thanks for always dropping by!
Blessings to you,too!
Yes,let the dirt filled snickers take us there.
Thank you so much,Claudia!
Ohh... kinda sad, but beautiful nonetheless!
I really like the switching between dream and reality in this poem.. it's been done wonderfully well!
And finally, where you say how your dirt shoes will show you how to dance... that's absolutely stunning! Lovely message here, June.. hopeful and positive!
Stay thus, my friend..
xoxox
Thanks for the love at JP...
love your spirits.
keep up the excellence.
Award/Treats 4 Poetic Friends of Jingle, Happy Thursday!
Thanks,Kavita!Most of these stuffs are intended for me.To help me be positive ,always.Which is sometimes so hard a task.
Love yours!Am learning lots from you,guys!
You've been real nice and supportive,Jingle.Thanks,too.
This is really beautiful!
I admire his poetry.
Kisses from Brazil.
Thanks,Gabriela.I'm so glad you liked it.
Pls.drop by,again.
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